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Recent surveys show increased interest in relocation and travel to other countries. What may be the reasons for this trend, and what will be the possible outcome from this behavior? Provide examples for your opinion

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Relocation and travel to other countries have become a great concern in today’s society. Recent data have shown the increase in
this
 trend. In
this
 easy we will articulate the reasons and the consequences of
this
 matter. There are some points why people immigrate to other nations.
First
, many people move to another country because they want to have a chance of living a better life than they used to be.
Moreover
, they will have more opportunities to accept higher education, especially younger ones.
Additionally
, people will be protected in a finer
way thanks
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way, thanks
 to the high quality of security in
developed
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development
 countries.
Second
, people will be able to experience a new country and culture while travelling.
In addition
, they can improve their knowledge and get a global perspective of the world.
Furthermore
, they can improve how to communicate with others.
Next
, the essay will discuss the result of
this
 phenomenon. These migrations sometimes cause more problems than they solve for both individuals and society.
First
 of all, some people may find it difficult to find jobs because of the lack of language skills or adaptation,
therefore
 some of them are homesick and want to give up.
Also
, even experienced experts that are looking for a better occupation, hardly get what they want.
Second
, to
translocate
 too much may lead to overpopulation in some areas or even countries. In conclusion, people immigrating to have a better life is not
wrong but
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wrong, but
 everything has two sides of it,
besides
 the positive side, there are negative aspects. So it’s very necessary to think about both pros and cons.
Also
, in the future the government
has
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will have
 to have a policy for
this
 circumstance.

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