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Nowadays, we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening What can government do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced.

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Recently, there has been an upsurge in the production of substandard goods which could be due to lack of
quality
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 control and certain capital measures expected of an entrepreneur to have before the establishment of a
business
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. To start with, for a
business
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 that deals in the production of goods and services to strive, there are some essential factors that must be taken into consideration in other to be acceptable locally and internationally.
This
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 implies that the image of a product is seen in its
quality
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.
However
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, some businesses have failed in producing good
quality
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 due to low
quality
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 control by
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of
he agency in charge of it.
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, according to the guardian newspaper, Nigeria customs arrested 25% of
business
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 owners for making fake drugs which ha
s affected s
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have affected
ome rural dwellers.
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, most establishments deteriorated in promoting good values of their products because of low budget that were not put into consideration before establishing their companies.
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 getting mechanical equipments and essential materials before setting up a
business
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.
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,
this
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 reduces the positive feedbacks the organisation stands to get in a competitive environment. Having mentioned the causes, to solve these problems and promote the best in the commodity sector, it
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it
s pertinent for the government to intervene by ensuring that law and enforcement agencies monitors some of the companies meticulously.
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 means that they should ca
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carry out
andatory inspections monthly to alleviate criminals that have refused to adhere to the rules and regulations in setting up an enterprise in the country. For instance, Nafdac recorded 80% of success rate
last
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 year October in the investigation of some companies that have been obeying rules in the manufacturing of
quality
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 goods.
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, go
vernment s
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the government
hould assist small scale trades financially. The implication of
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 is that, it
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it
ortrays the country as a place where international bodies can invest in. In conclusion, while it is obvious that pr
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the production
f substandard items have created a gap in the
business
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 sector, it can be corrected by adequate provision of resources needed for traders and compulsory inspection regulated by commodity agencies.
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