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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit these places?

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Undoubtedly, tourism has become an indispensable sector that has an impact on the development of the country's economy. Many historical places and museums are generally visited by foreign commuters. While, the interest of museums and historical sites is very low in local residents. There are some reasons why citizens do not stay historical places.
Firstly
 masses feel bore whenever, they were vacationing in same places several times.
Such
 as art galleries, museums, historical buildings. So people feel that it is a waste of time to vacation historical sites. It is biggest factor to reduce the number of local visitors to call to heritage places.
In addition
 to it, many of the museums and historical sites charge an entry fee, if person visited it once, they would pay again and again to watch the same material.
Therefore
, people avoid to explore to local heritage places because they want to see something new every time.
On the other hand
, there are various mediums which can be done to attract local visitors to historical places.
Firstly local
Accept comma addition
Firstly, local
 museums and historical sites should provide free weekend tickets or discounts for citizens which would help increase in the number of local people to appoint to heritage places.
Secondly
, masses can enjoy if events and festivals are held there,
this
 is the alternative way to attract the attention of local residents.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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