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Men and women employed in full-time jobs should share the responsibilities of household chores. Do you agree or disagree? Share relevant personal experiences.

#men #women #jobs #responsibilities #household #chores #experiences
To get started it is important to
work
 every day, because the modern society is very expensive. Education experts say that the demand for a high level for
succeed
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succeeding
 in the
work
.
Firstly
, we need the a
lot
 of money of learning
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
work
 qualifications. We study for many years the lesson high to make a
work
 what keep up with as another country. Going abroad to
work
 is a fantastic experience and we make a
lot
 more progress. We capable of earning a
lot
 of money. The advantages are obvious because we have a life very
good
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well
. But it is important to find a
people
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person
 what deal with every
problems
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problem
 of society. To summarize
,
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,
it is a suitable
education but
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education, but
 it is important to have a good school and to learning for many years, and it is necessary a
lot
 of money.

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