some people think that children today are not as fit and healthy as in the past do you agree or disagree with this statement
it is true that no have time play outdoor activities which
children
are future
of our world .They have Correct article usage
the future
important
role Add an article
the important
an important
of
family and society. nowadays more people think Change preposition
in
about
Change preposition
that
children
have
no fit and Verb problem
are
good
health as Change preposition
in good
then
the past .personally, i
strongly agreeChange the capitalization
I
Add the preposition
on
to
with
this
statement and discuss about
my ideas. Remove the preposition
apply
To begin
with , it notice to be
that , because these days Verb problem
seems
childrens
more busy Correct your spelling
children
children's
in
Change preposition
with
study
Fix the agreement mistake
studies
overburdened
. Correct word choice
and overburdened
beside
,theyReplace the word
besides
have
busy Verb problem
are
in
eight hours in school andChange preposition
for
Add a missing verb
do
Fix the infinitive
to
Add a missing verb
has the
the
bad effect on Correct article usage
a
children
health.Change noun form
children's
Moreover
,children's
eat fast food and Change noun form
children
no
take Add a missing verb
do no
Correct article usage
a properly
properly
diet because they Change the word
proper
influence
Wrong verb form
are influenced
advertisements
on watch television and they buy more Change preposition
by advertisements
eat
snack food.Verb problem
apply
Similary
,in Correct your spelling
Similarly
modern
era most Add an article
the modern
children
play indoor games on computer
and mobile Add an article
the computer
a computer
phone
which they Fix the agreement mistake
phones
bad
effect on Correct article usage
a bad
there
eyes and mind.Replace the word
their
for
instance ,Capitalize word
For
mostly
Correct your spelling
most
children
have long
time sit front of Correct article usage
a long
television
and computer after they feel Correct article usage
the television
weakness
and backbone Replace the word
weak
problem
. Fix the agreement mistake
problems
furthermore
,looking towards more other reasons,Correct article usage
the
enviroment
is not good because in many cities have so much pollution and depression about Correct your spelling
environment
the
career.Change the word
their
for
example , in Capitalize word
For
india
mostly poor family Change the capitalization
India
childrens
faces Correct your spelling
children's
children
finicial
problem which they Correct your spelling
financial
no
gain the life or career Correct your spelling
do
as well as
bad effcet
on our health. Correct your spelling
effect
effects
undoubtely
,Correct your spelling
Undoubtedly
nowdays
in markets there are Correct the word
nowadays
number
of fruits and vegetables Change the article
a number
the number
grow
with Wrong verb form
grown
chemical
and sprays they Fix the agreement mistake
chemicals
are no grow
Change the verb form
are no grown
are no growing
with
Change preposition
apply
natural
. so Change the word
naturally
children
can eat this
Correct determiner usage
these
fuits
after there are feel more illness in Correct your spelling
fruits
fruit
body
Correct pronoun usage
their body
likewise
they increase the
heart diseases which they Correct article usage
apply
not
Add the comma(s)
, not
fully
fit body and Add an article
the fully
a fully
heathy
mind Correct your spelling
healthy
To sum up
, it is clearly
that , Change the word
clear
childers
can not more time spend on Correct your spelling
children
Add an article
the study
study
and indoor games .Wrong verb form
studying
However
, parents can important role in chldren
awareness and they Correct your spelling
children
give
teach more moral lessons.Verb problem
apply
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