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some people think that children today are not as fit and healthy as in the past do you agree or disagree with this statement

#people #children
it is true that
children
 are
future
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the future
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 of our world .They have
important
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the important
an important
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 role
of
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in
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 family and society. nowadays more people think
about
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that
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children
have
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are
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 no fit and
good
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in good
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 health as
then
 the past .personally,
i
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I
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 strongly agree
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on
to
with
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this
 statement and discuss
about
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apply
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my ideas.
To begin
 with , it
notice to be
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seems
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 that , because these days
childrens
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children
children's
 more busy
in
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with
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study
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studies
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overburdened
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and overburdened
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.
beside
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besides
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,they
have
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are
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busy
in
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for
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 eight hours in school and
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do
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no have time
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to
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play outdoor activities which
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has the
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the
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a
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 bad effect on
children
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children's
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 health.
Moreover
,
children's
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children
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 eat fast food and
no
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do no
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 take
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a properly
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properly
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proper
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 diet because they
influence
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are influenced
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advertisements
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by advertisements
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 on watch television and they buy more
eat
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apply
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snack food.
Similary
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Similarly
,in
modern
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the modern
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 era most
children
 play indoor games on
computer
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the computer
a computer
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 and mobile
phone
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phones
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 which they
bad
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a bad
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 effect on
there
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their
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 eyes and mind.
for
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For
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 instance ,
mostly
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most
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children
 have
long
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a long
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 time sit front of
television
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the television
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 and computer after they feel
weakness
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weak
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 and backbone
problem
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problems
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.
furthermore
 ,looking towards more other reasons,
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the
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enviroment
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environment
is not good because in many cities have so much pollution and depression about
the
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their
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 career.
for
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 example , in
india
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India
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 mostly poor family
childrens
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children's
children
 faces
finicial
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financial
 problem which they
no
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do
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 gain the life or career
as well as
 bad
effcet
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effect
effects
 on our health.
undoubtely
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Undoubtedly
,
nowdays
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nowadays
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 in markets there are
number
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a number
the number
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 of fruits and vegetables
grow
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grown
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 with
chemical
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chemicals
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 and sprays they
are no grow
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are no grown
are no growing
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with
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apply
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natural
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naturally
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. so
children
 can eat
this
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these
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fuits
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fruits
fruit
 after there are feel more illness in
body
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their body
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likewise
 they increase
the
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apply
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heart diseases which they
not
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, not
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fully
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the fully
a fully
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 fit body and
heathy
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healthy
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 mind
To sum up
, it is
clearly
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clear
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that ,
childers
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children
 can not more time spend on
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the study
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study
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studying
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 and indoor games .
However
, parents can important role in
chldren
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children
 awareness and they
give
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apply
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teach more moral lessons.
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