the graph below shows the percentages of people in different age groups to the gym at least once a month in Europe from 1998 to 2018 and the projection

the graph below shows the percentages of people in different age groups to the gym at least once a month in Europe from 1998 to 2018 and the projection
The line graph compares the percentage of people in different age
groups
who went to the gym at least once a month in Europe from 1998 to 2018 and the projection. The percentage of the group of 44 to 53
years
old
is almost keep
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stably which only rise about 3% in 20
years
. The group of 34 to 43
years
also
increased gradually in 20
years
, but the
number of
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the proportion of 34 to 43
years
is higher than the 44 to 53 one. What’s more, it is predicted that the trend of
34
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the 34
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to 43 group will grow faster than the other one. The
groups
of 24 to 33
years
old and 18 to 23
years
old
are
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increased rapidly in total.
In
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1998 to 2010,
this
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two
groups
all keep the scale between 15 to 20
percent
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although
have a
slight
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increased
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. In summary, the trend of the percentage of gym goers in four age brackets is increasing.
According to
this
graph, it is easy to
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that the proportion of the age
groups
which
less
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are less
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than 33
years
old is higher than
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those which
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which
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those
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more
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are more
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than 33
years
old.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, years with synonyms.
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