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Band 4.5

Today,people are using the things and rhrowing or replacing it with latest models or latest fashion . Do the disadvantages pf throwaway society outweigh any possible economic advantage ?

Concurrently,
general public
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the general public
are using
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is using
 the things and throwing or else replacing it with the latest trends. According to my perception I believe merits are more than demerits. My inclination along with justification would be dissuaded in the ensuing paragraphs. On
one
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hand there
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hand, there
 are many pros of using latest models. The foremost
one
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 is people might be aware regarding latest technology.
This
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 is to say, in the rural
areas
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area's
area
 few individuals are still using older things.So when they replace
this
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 thing with the latest models they know about technology.
Furthermore
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, most of the latest models are
time
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 saver. To elaborate,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 in the household chores mostly women
are prefer
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prefer
are preferring
are preferred
 to
use
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 electronic equipment because they have
manage
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managed
time
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 work along with home so they never
use
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 old things which take more
time
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.
In addition
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 to
this
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,
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,
individuals
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individual's
individual
 lifestyle has been
change
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changed
.
This
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 is to say, due to enhance the income of individuals, people live in
luxurious way
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a luxurious way
. They can afford
latest equipment
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the latest equipment
. So that they throw the old things and buy latest technological equipments.
Last
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 but not least, it is
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
for
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of
generate
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generating
 overall economy
.
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.
This
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 is
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 of most of the businesses are
make
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making
made
 modern technological
product
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 and advertise by various social media.So that customers are
lure
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lured
 or desire to get those products.
On the contrary
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, there are numerous cons of
this
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. To commence with, it leads to increase
number
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the number
 of land pollution. To support it can be explained that, when society are throwing old things at some
area
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area, then
then
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 that area gathered by all rubbish and it
can not
can not
cannot
 be converted into
different
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different products
a different product
product
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.So no
one
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 can
use
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this
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 and
this
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 may convert into foul smell with lots of
stary
a message that tells the particulars of an act or occurrence or course of events; presented in writing or drama or cinema or as a radio or television program
story
stray
 animals being there.
Moreover
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,
most famous proverb
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the most famous proverb
 is "old is gold "
.
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.
 Now a
days
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day
 most of the products are not sustainable for a longer period of
time
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 and
one
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 can
use
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 and broke it very easily.
Thus
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, to conclude the
discussion it
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discussion, it
 can
be
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finally be said
finally
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 said that
pople
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
use
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 things
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 throw with the help of latest
product
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.
Although
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 it is increasing
number
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the number
 of pollution and not sustainable for a long
time
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,
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,
 people aware about latest technology as well as save
time
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. So that the disadvantages of throwing or replacing the
product
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 are negligible as compared to the advantages.

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