The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during 1990s. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during 1990s.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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There are two charts about
land
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degradation
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. The pie chart shows the primary causes of
land
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degradation
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around the world, the other which is a table shows the effects these causes have
in
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on
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three continents during the 1990s. There are three main reasons that make
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land
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the land
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used in agricultural activity become less arable between 1990-1999: over-grazing (raising too
many
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much
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livestocks
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livestock
),
over-cultivation
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(growing too many crops), and deforestation (destroying
forest
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forests
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). If we look into the places or continents where
is
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are
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most affected, it is Europe,
following
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followed
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are Oceania which placed Australia and North America.
According to
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the pie chart, the leading cause of
land
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degradation
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in the 1990s is raising too
many
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much
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livestocks
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livestock
which accounts for 35
percent
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per cent
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. Deforestation is the
second
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-most leading cause which accounts for about one-
third
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or 30
percent
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per cent
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.
Over-cultivation
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followed up with 28
percent
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
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,
according to
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the table, we can see that Europe was the most affected continent
in
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by
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both
from
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apply
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deforestation and
over-cultivation
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, resulting in
highest
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the highest
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total
land
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degradation
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. Oceania,
however
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, despite no
land
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degraded from
over-cultivation
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,
it
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apply
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suffered the heaviest damage from over-grazing. North America took
a
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the
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smallest hit from each cause and total
land
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degradation
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land, degradation, over-cultivation with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pie chart
  • Table
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Decreasing productivity
  • Reasons
  • Regional variations
  • Data
  • Summarize
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