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Modern cultures around the world have become similar as compared to the past. What are the main reasons for it? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Every day areas of the world
become
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becomes
is becoming
 similar.
since
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Since
 compared to years back western culture
become
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has become
 same around the world.
the
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The
 main reason
of
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for
this
 trend is globalisation.
in
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In
 my point of view is
positive development
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a positive development
.
Firstly
,
Accept space
,
rising in travel and tourism help to improve more opportunities in
employment sector
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the employment sector
.From where many people will receive a benefit of jobs and develops the knowledge the communication skills.
For example
,
Accept space
,
citizens of Rajasthan which is located
at
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in
northern part
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the northern part
 of Gujarat (India)
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
 their knowledge and skills of hospitality after the historical places became famous by historical monuments.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
globalisation
help
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helps
 to make profit in raising economic fund too.
which
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Which
 help to improve the basic public facility of their own region
,
Accept space
,
moreover
,
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,
public
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the public
 will
also
 gain awareness of different country product and currency
,
Accept space
,
which brings equality and respect towards various land.
Instant
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An instant
 before the time people were not aware of different
areas
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area's
 customs and cultural but now every human is aware about it. To conclude, connect with different countries culture and tradition help to improve
,
Accept space
,
learn
also
 respect the other
people
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peoples'
person's
 values.

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