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you recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to colleg or to try to get a job. you think he/she should get a job.

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Dear Sandeep, I am writing
this
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 letter to suggest you why getting a
job
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 are better option for you rather than going to
college
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. The
first
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 reason for why you would not enjoy going to
college
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 is high fees. Going
college
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 is not
bad but
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bad, but
 as you
already done
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have already done
already did
 your study in masters. So it’s better to do
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job
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the job
a job
. Apart from that, there are too many expenses like parties with friends, outing and picnics. And sometimes in
college
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 you could make bad friends and you will
also
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 taking habits of bad friends which is not good for
you
of you or yourself
your
 future. After that I would like to suggest you that you should go for
job
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 because doing
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job
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a job
the job
 you can get more knowledgeable skills and Experience.
For example
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, you can go for receptionist
job
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 where you can meet
lot
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lots
 of people from different nations and regions and you can talk to them about their culture, religion and get more knowledge from them. Same like
as
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
, there are many
advantage
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advantages
for
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of
to
 getting the
job
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. You can earn money and
then
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 you can buy anything from you pay and you can
also
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fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 your dreams.
Another
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Other
 than that, you can help your father
also
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 by putting some in household expenses. In conclusion, as I told you how many benefits while getting jobs rather than going to
college
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. So
lastly
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 again, I will suggest you to
looking
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look
 for
better
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better jobs
a better job
job
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 and better future, Good luck. Yours sincerely Kiranjeet kaur

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