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More and more businesses as well individuals are choosing to communicate either professionally or socially using technology rather than being face to face.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communicating.

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Organizations and people are increasingly communicating for the purpose of work and
personally
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personal
personality
 with the aid of the
technology
 as opposed to
physically
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physical
.
Although
 communicating with
technology
 is a lot cheaper and convenient,
However
, it has become addictive and turned our relationships cold. On the one hand, businesses and persons find it convenient and much cheaper to reach their staff via the telephone or email. It is a lot easier than it used to be in the old days when these services were unavailable.
For example
, an employer can decide to schedule an
impromtu
an extemporaneous speech or remark
impromptu
 meeting by sending an email to all employees concerned and expect to meet a full quorum.
On the other hand
, the use of
technology
 has made us depend so much on it that we cannot seem to thrive without our mobile phones, internet
.
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.
To illustrate, there is hardly anyone you would see these days that do not have a mobile phone
,
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,
we do not make physical visits to friends and family
anymore but
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anymore, but
 engage ourselves at every opportunity going through one form of social media or the other. To conclude, there is no denying that face to face communication is being left behind by organizations and individuals in favour of
technology
, but in my opinion the disadvantage of the risk of addiction
in
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with
technology
 outweighs it's convenience.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Efficiency
  • Convenience
  • Instant messaging
  • Video calls
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Economical
  • Accessibility
  • Physical barriers
  • Nuanced understanding
  • Impersonal
  • Misunderstandings
  • Reliance
  • Technical failures
  • Vulnerable
  • Security breaches
  • Hacking
  • Data theft
  • Sensitive information
  • Digital communication
  • Face-to-face interactions
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