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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People from underdeveloped countries should be given a chance who
have
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has
 the knowledge & skills for a particular job. I totally agree with
this
 statement that poor people should be given opportunity to grow in the rich countries to showcase their talent and prove themselves to be the asset to their country. Many people belonging from the backward or the poor families have many children who have a dream to go abroad, earn huge dollars, help their families to grow and even settle down to
such
 big countries. To get a better life, free from corruption and pollution people start fantasizing their lives in countries like USA, UK and many other places, for which they work super hard on themselves and in their studies to get the knowledge and skills to get the dream job.
Therefore
, rich countries provide employment to
such
 bright students, and talented workers to help them and their family to grow.
This
 not only results to boost the economy of the poor countries like India, Bhutan and help them to prosper their goals, but
also
, many developed countries have a special quota
for
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of
 the international applicants as they know the value of
such
 skilled workers.
Such
 countries appreciate their work and give them a warm welcome with all the facilities. To conclude, the developed countries should help
the poor
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poorer
 countries
to increase
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increase
 their economy in every way, whether it is related to food, trading or giving them job offers. Once a person is given a chance of living their dream and helping their families,
such
 people give their best in rich countries, grow, and make worth of that opportunity.
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