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In recent years, many small shop have closed because customer travel to large shopping malls. is this a positive or negative development.

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The closure of small local shops is increasing nowadays. Some people think that most of the population does the purchasing of routine things from the large shopping malls that’s why local shop keepers has to shut up their businesses.
This
 essay will argue why
this
 issue does worse impact on the society. In fact, to run the small local shop, people need low budget.
On the other hand
, people have to invest a lot of money to acquire a small shop in a mall. So small investors cannot afford to shift their business in a mall.
As a result
, they have to stop their business and
finally
 it tends to increase the poverty level in the society. Absence of resident shops can affect the family cost of any common man as well. Now I am giving you an example of a situation of any middle class family to defend my statement. Whenever a person goes to the mall and starts shopping as per list prepared on the basis of a routine requirement to keep the account at a certain level. While shopping, he may purchase extra items that are not in the list as well as unnecessary. So the bill amount do increased automatically and goes out of allocation. Shops near to our residential area is very useful to meet our urgent requirement. We can get the required quantity at reasonable price whenever we need. So we can minimize the loss of material as well.
Although huge
Suggestion
Although a huge
 shopping centres is one of the tools of any modern culture, but it helps to deviate the individuals from the real soul of society.
Therefore
, anything is good when it is in limit.

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