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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes and suggest possible solutions?

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New employees are perceived as lacking in basic interpersonal skills
such
 as teamwork.
This
 trait is caused by the education they received and the solution to
this
 problem is to create an environment that young people can learn and value these important skills.
Firstly
, young adults have been taught to be confident, to believe in themselves and to live for themselves only. They have been learning everything to become a successful person material wise.
This
 education f
rom
Suggestion
of
the parents and the materialistic society make
this
 generation who they are today, successful but lack empathy, lack understanding and listening skills. They have been trained to compete rather than to live.
Secondly
, young generation d
o not realise
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does not realise
the significance of interpersonal skills, cooperative skills, understanding and empathy because they have little contact t
o
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with
them. Schools have placed emphasis on test score rather than students being their whole person. Parents praise kids when they achieve more than when they are being kind. If the society does not value these skills, neither do the people. The solutions to
this
 identified problem can be using the media to promote good behaviours. People should reflect and share the feelings when we do something nice, share the values of helping people, the values of a family, a team, a community where everyone is kind and understanding Employers can give out group tasks and guide their young employees along the way. They may struggle at
f
irst but
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first, but
they will learn eventually. Team building activities are helpful to understand more about other colleagues outside their work environment. Schools and parents should teach kids to live in harmony with themselves and the community. In conclusion, interpersonal skills are necessary and they are skills that can be learned. Dealing with a generation lacking these skills can be c
hallenging but
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challenging, but
it is possible to teach them. People learn from their mistakes and grow. Rather than having a negative attitude with young people, older generations can share their understanding
first
 and the youngsters will learn from them.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interpersonal skills
  • cooperative skills
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital communication
  • non-verbal cues
  • active listening
  • education system
  • technical knowledge
  • soft skills
  • remote work
  • work environment
  • comprehensive training programs
  • workshops
  • teamwork
  • role-playing scenarios
  • open communication
  • collaborative efforts
  • educational institutions
  • curriculums
  • hybrid work models
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