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In many places, people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, in many places around the world people’s lifestyles are changing rapidly, because of many various opened facilities, and
this
 affects family relationships. As in every situation, it has advantages and disadvantages too. As an advantage I can consider the way that people take the or
lifestyle
 into account and their families. Sharing about your
lifestyle
 with your family will help in some cases to get closer to each other. When family members have something to do together, it will make the family a team and family members will learn how to respect each other’s
lifestyle
.
Furthermore
, if the person decided to follow healthy
lifestyle
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lifestyle, then
then
 it will be easier to do it together or all family members if they decide to do it. As an example, I can say that I’m trying to live a healthy
lifestyle
 and my mother with my sister support me by following my choice. Indeed, we have a lot of themes to discuss and talk.
On the other hand
, if the person has
lifestyle not
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lifestyle, not
 shared with family members
then
 it would be a problem because you might spend a lot of
time
 for your interests.
Consequently you
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Consequently, you
 won’t have spare
time
 for your family members which affects the family relationship.
For example
, if someone is a travel blogger or travelling journalist, they may not have enough
time
 to be in contact with their families, because of different
time
 zones. All in all, in my honest opinion advantages of modern
lifestyle
 won’t outweigh the disadvantages. Wherever and whenever we are, we always need to get in touch with our closed ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geographic separation
  • economic advancement
  • technological advancements
  • face-to-face interactions
  • egalitarian structures
  • gender roles
  • traditional roles
  • work demands
  • financial stability
  • access to education
  • healthcare
  • cultural shifts
  • traditions
  • cultural identity
  • family heritage
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