nowadays families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have used to this. Explain the reason for this and discuss any possible effects in it may have on society.

In
Suggestion
At
the present
time
people are drifting apart from their families, not like the previous generations.
Firstly
,
this
essay will discuss the reasons of
this
issue and
secondly
, it will discuss it effect. Families are spending less and less
time
together. The issue is, most parents are working outside their
home
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homes
for long hours, trying
there
of them or themselves
their
best to keep up with the workload and the children are spending most of
there
of them or themselves
their
day at the school, busy with classes and after school clubs and sports. So, between trying to be good at work, keeping up with the exams and assignments and doing the house chores, spending quality
time
together are the
last
thing on
there
of them or themselves
their
mind as the burnout is having
it
it is
it's
toll on them. A survey done by the Social Institute in 2017, reported that 60% of
american
of or relating to the United States of America or its people or language or culture
American
families are spending less than 35 minutes with their partner and kids on weekdays. The advancing technology can play a significant role in
this
problem. With the invention of the internet, smart phones and
games
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game
devices, people would rather spend their
time
facing
there
of them or themselves
their
phones or playing on the playstation rather than with their family and loved ones.
Also
, the age gap between the parents and the children is adding to the issue. As the parents aren’t able to connect with their kids and most children are seeing their parents as outdated old fashioned individuals and would rather spend the
time
they have with their friends. Spending less one on one
time
with the children can
leads
Suggestion
lead
to the breakdown of communication and family bonds.
Hence
, the child will be emotionally
distress
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distressing
distressed
,
Accept space
,
falling on back on his grade resorting to risky
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
such
as, violence, delinquency, tobacco and drug use and unsafe sexual relationships just to get their
parents
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parents'
attentions
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attention
. In conclusion, family quality
time
is important as the lack of it can majorly
effect
have an effect upon
affect
the family
on
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in
negative ways. People should at least take 30 minutes of their day and spend it with their family.

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