Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under the age of 18. Some psychologists claim that the basic reason for this is that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers.

Many people hold the belief that violent images we encounter in video games or television are linked to higher rates of crime. From my own experience,
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I
have formed the impression that
this
correlation is not always positive. Acting against the law or social norms has been part of humanity since the beginning of time, before electricity was even invented. While the causes of crime are far more complex and multi factorial. During ancient times and up till modern
days crime
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days with crime
day crime
day day crime
day's crime
has always been present and probably will always be. At
first
people would commit crimes in order to survive and to provide food for their families. Later the desire for control and power lead to wars and conflicts between countries. Nowadays the engagement in illegal activities is related to more social and
economical
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economic
factors. Poverty, domestic violence during childhood and drug abuse are some of the reasons why people commit crimes. Despite being exposed or not to brutal or violent images, one would steal if he is starving and there is no other thing to do. Take
for instance
, someone who was born is circumstances where in early
age he
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age, he
was abused
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by
parents, the cycle of violence will continue being part of his adult life.
On the other hand
someone who is a drug user, being under the effect of narcotic substances has poor judgment and is more likely to
became
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become
a law offender.
Its
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It's
true that media and technology have a great impact in our life and especially in young children, but going as far as breaking the law takes more than just something we have seen on television or a game. There
are
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is
a mixture of social and
economical
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economic
factors that can lead to
such
actions.
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