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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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• Some people believe that some companies sponsoring sports as a way of advertising is advantageous whilst others argue that it has drawbacks. • The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument. • On one
hand it's
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hand, it's
 is clear that nowadays many companies sponsor sports in order to advertise themselves. It has its advantages as well as its disadvantages.
First advantage
Suggestion
The first advantage
 of sponsoring sport is sportsmen are given best goods of the
company
 free of charge and
by
Suggestion
with
 the help of these equipments sportsmen can achieve high prestige which affects positively for the
company
 too.
For
instance in
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instance, in
such case
Suggestion
a such case company
company
 can link their names to successful players which in its turn can affect the sales of the
company
 rise rapidly.
Furthermore as
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Furthermore, as
 many people claim sports has plenty of followers throughout social
media which
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media, which
 provides the
company
 with social media support which that
also
 can help the sales to rise. •
On the other hand
 the other people argue about
harm
Suggestion
the harm
 of the sponsoring sports. The disadvantage of advertising through sport is that the
company
 can be too closely linked with the team or the player which can cause bad effects on
company
Suggestion
the company
. To put it
to
Suggestion
in
 another way, the sales of the
company
 could be affected by performance or
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of the sportsmen so when sportsmen misbehave or face a fall in their careers
consequently
 it can make the sales drop.²³³ • On the whole, I believe that the idea of advertising through sponsoring sports is beneficial whilst
on the other
hand it's
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hand, it's
 undeniable that it has its drawbacks as well. 262words

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sports sponsorship
  • financial support
  • athletes
  • brand visibility
  • awareness
  • commercialization
  • integrity
  • dependencies
  • corporate funds
  • unethical practices
  • strategic partnerships
  • communal relations
  • promote healthy lifestyles
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