Some people think that the government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others argue it is the responsibility of each individual. Discuss both views and give your opinion

healthy
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Healthy
diet helps people maintain and improve their general
health
.
it
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It
is important to intake right nutrient daily to obtain a good meal.
having
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Having
an unhealthy cuisine can be a major risk factor for a number
for
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of
cronic
being long-lasting and recurrent or characterized by long suffering
chronic
diseases including
Accept comma addition
diseases, including
high blood pressure and diabetes and overweights.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
partilly
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parted
partially
partly
with the statement.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will shed light on both
view
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views
in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, a group of masses that
Government
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the Government
should encourage people for
consume
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consuming
balance diet. The
food
and drug administration and
health
commission of parliament are providing some amenities
such
as free education and treatment. They should give people
education
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educated
about physical study.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
that, people might be
awear
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
wear
from
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of
pitiable diseases. The minister of
health
department should be
consious
intentionally conceived
conscious
citizens to healthy fare includes vitamins, proteins, minerals. Nowadays, people are junk
food
because they are busy with their works.
As a result
, they do not eat homemade
food
as they have no enough time
for
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to
prepare the
food
. Fast
food
is a tasty and
chepest
so, snacks are eaten.
consequently
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Consequently
, they are suffering from obesity, cancer, heart attack
.
Accept space
.
Swedon
a Scandinavian kingdom in the eastern part of the Scandinavian Peninsula
Sweden
and Denmark are good example
for
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of
it.
In addition
, some laws should be created about diet
.
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.
people
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People
should
awear
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
wear
through
media
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the media
.
Accept space
.
On the other hand
,
Accept space
,
individual have some responsibilities about
thrir
of them or themselves
their
health
to remain healthy. They should
adopte
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adopt e
good habits
such
as, get up early and take proper rest.
presently
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Presently
, many people have addicted to late the
watch
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watching
television and playing games.
This
is not better for physical
health
because of can be weaken their
eyeside
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eye side
.
juvenile
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Juvenile
should be play
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should play
should be played
outdoor games to
entertainment
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entertain
and physical workout.
For instance
, they are
runing
(American football) a play in which a player attempts to carry the ball through or past the opposing team
running
ruining
,
colories
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the calories
calories
colours
colonies
would be
burn
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burned
and kids feel
engertic
possessing or exerting or displaying energy
energetic
. The body fat
will be reduce
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will be reduced
. The
diagest
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
biggest
system will be
proper
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properly
work
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working
.
people
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People
will stay healthy. In conclusion, a
citizens
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citizen
keep
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keeps
country alive and drive into the future.
Thus
, people should pay
attension
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attention
on
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to
their
health
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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