Some people think that the government has the duty to ensure its citizens have a healthy diet, while others argue it is the responsibility of each individual. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Healthy diet helps people maintain and improve their general fitness. It is important to intake right nutrient daily to obtain a good meal. Having an unhealthy cuisine can be a major risk factor for a number for chronic diseases, including high blood pressure and diabetes and overweights. I
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refers to the speaker or writer
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will shed light on both
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views
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with, a group of masses that the Government should encourage people for
consume
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consuming
balance diet. The food and drug administration and
health
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commission of parliament are providing some amenities
such
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as free educated and treatment. They should give people
education
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educated
about physical study. So that, people might be aware
from
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of
pitiable diseases. The minister of
health
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department should be conscious citizens to healthy fare includes vitamins, proteins, minerals. Nowadays, people are junk bread because they are busy with their works.
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, they do not eat homemade feed as they have no enough time for
prepare
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preparing
the foodstuff. Fast food is a tasty and
chepest
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cheap
cheapest
. So, snacks are eaten.
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, they are suffering from obesity, cancer, heart attack
.
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Sweden and Denmark are good example of it.
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, some laws should be created about diet
.
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people
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People
should aware through the media
.
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On the other hand
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,
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individual have some responsibilities about
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of them or themselves
their
health
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to remain healthy. They should
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adopt e
good habits
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as, get up early and take proper rest.
presently
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Presently
, many people have addicted to late the watching television and playing games.
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is not better for physical
health
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because of can be weaken their eye side. Juvenile should be
play
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playing
outdoor games to entertain and physical workout.
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, they are
runing
(American football) a play in which a player attempts to carry the ball through or past the opposing team
running
ruining
,
colories
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the calories
calories
colours
colonies
would be
burn
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burned
and kids feel
engertic
possessing or exerting or displaying energy
energetic
. The body fat
will be reduce
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will be reduced
. The
diagest
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
biggest
system will be properly working. People will stay healthy. In conclusion, a citizen keeps country alive and drive into the future.
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, people should pay attention to their
health
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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