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Governments give a lot of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been used elsewhere. Discuss both vioews and give your opinion.

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In some countries, governments sponsor artists in many ways. While some would say that money should be spent elsewhere, I believe that
art
 is
one
 of the essential elements
for
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of
 society development. On the
one
 hand, some people think that the
government
 should only spend money on something
that is
 essential for people’s living. It is
becase
for the reason that; on account of
because
 areas
such
 as health care and infrastructure are affecting people’s daily life more directly.
For
example in
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example, in
 Thailand, there are only 20% of
art
 galleries that are funded by the
government
 because most of the resources are spent on
health care system
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the health care system
 and housing.
Although
 people’s basic needs should be taken care of, I believe that it is
also
 the
government
’s responsibility to ensure their help is not limited only to basic needs but
a
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an
 all-rounded development including
art
 and culture.
On the other hand
, some people agree that supporting artists
is
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are
one
 of the
government
’s
duty
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duties
. With the help
from
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of
government
-owned institutions, artists no longer have to work for commercial purposes in order to earn a living, but to make
art
 freely, which is important for a country to have a positive
art
 and cultural growth.
For
example in
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example, in
 Japan,
ceramics
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ceramic
 artists are sponsored by
government
 programs to work in artist villages to create artwork since 1990s, yet, they have been making remarkable achievements in the global world of ceramics.
Therefore I
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Therefore, I
 believe that with the
government
’s help, it will make a great difference
for
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in
 a country’s cultural good. In conclusion,
although
 some argued that
art
 is not as important as other basic needs, I believe that having the
government
 to help
on
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in
with
art
 development is as important because developing a quality living in the nation is
a
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an
 all-rounded thing and
art
 is
one
 of the key cultural elements that should not be neglected.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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