some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to bad for people.

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Some
people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to bad for people. Balance diet helps people maintain and improve their general health. It is undeniable that proper food is a definitely key of
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
. Having an unhealthy meal a major risk factor for chronic diseases, including blood pressure,
overweigh
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
, diabetes. I agree with the statement.
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
will shed light on the reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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with, the
first
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and foremost matter is, junk foodstuff is not
better
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good
for
one
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's lives. It has rich fat,
fiber
a slender and greatly elongated substance capable of being spun into yarn
fibre
and sugar alone with carbohydrate. People eat
overdisoder
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.
As a result
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,
Accept space
,
metabolism is spoiled by fast fare.
Therefore
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,
one
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has increased
of
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by
obesity. People are suffering from many diseases, includes
jndigestion
a disorder of digestive function characterized by discomfort or heartburn or nausea
indigestion
,
stomac
an enlarged and muscular saclike organ of the alimentary canal; the principal organ of digestion
stomach
cancer, heart
attract
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attracts
.
Moreover
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,
immune system
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the immune system
would be weaken
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would weaken
as
masses
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the masses
do not eat
proper cusinie
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the proper cuisine
proper cuisine
such
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as, proteins,
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as proteins,
vitamins,
minreals
solid homogeneous inorganic substances occurring in nature having a definite chemical composition
minerals
. Cold drink and street meat have involved high calories and sodium.
That is
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why, the saturated fat increases
one
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's body. Rapidly, the infection was
spreaded
distribute or disperse widely
spread
in
one
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's life.
On the other hand
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, some people assert
that is
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not banned because people are working. Nowadays, they have no enough time for
prepare
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prepares
fiod
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
food
found
in the home.
Consequwnce
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Consequence
, it is a cheap and affordable as well as tasty. In conclusion, the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
should encourage people to intake right nutrients to obtain a healthy meal. A citizen keeps country alive and drive into
future
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the future
. So, people should pay attention to their fitness.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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