The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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The pie charts indicated the percentage of various online

sales

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for retail departments in New Zealand in two years.

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, it can be seen

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2003 and 2013 that both

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film

sales

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and travel

sales

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increased in 2013,

whereas

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there is a decline in the proportion of clothes

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and travel

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. The

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of the clothes section, which was

initially

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almost a quarter of the total

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in 2013, went down significantly to 16%,

likewise

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, the travel

sectors

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sector

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fell steadily to 29% in 2013 from 36%. There is a sharp rise in film

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to be forming a

third

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of the total

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in 2013 from 21%.

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, the

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of the books department, which made up 21%, climbed slightly to 22% in 2013.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

126 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Comparative analysis
E-commerce
Retail sectors
Growth rate
Decade
Decline
Trends
Online transactions
Consumer behavior
Market share
Significant increase/decrease
Digital era
Accessibility
User-friendly platform
Market dynamics
Predictive outlook

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The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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Many teenagers now have their smart phones. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion?