The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.
The pie charts indicated the percentage of various online
sales
for retail departments in New Zealand in two years.
Overall
, it can be seen
in
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2003 and 2013 that both
of
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film
sales
and travel
sales
increased in 2013,
whereas
there is a decline in the proportion of clothes
sales
and travel
sales
. The
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of the clothes section, which was
initially
almost a quarter of the total
sales
in 2013, went down significantly to 16%,
likewise
, the travel
sectors
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fell steadily to 29% in 2013 from 36%. There is a sharp rise in film
sales
to be forming a
third
of the total
sales
in 2013 from 21%.
Similarly
, the
sales
of the books department, which made up 21%, climbed slightly to 22% in 2013.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • E-commerce
  • Retail sectors
  • Growth rate
  • Decade
  • Decline
  • Trends
  • Online transactions
  • Consumer behavior
  • Market share
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Digital era
  • Accessibility
  • User-friendly platform
  • Market dynamics
  • Predictive outlook
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