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In some countries, shopping online is replacing shopping at store. Discuss both the pros and cons of this trend?

#countries #store #trend
In many countries,
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online shopping has gained in popularity and outweighed brick-and-mortar stores
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, and
this
 trend has been receiving a great deal of public attention.
Although
this
 development is not without disadvantages, the upsides will justify these There are some dazzling advantages that can easily overshadow the disadvantages of shopping online.
First
, in order to save time
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to the shopping at
store
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the store
a store
stores
, people can purchase everything from at home with a click of
mouse
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the mouse
a mouse
.
For example
, young people, mostly order book, clothes or other product on Lazada without going out, which spending their time on
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 task.
Second
, online shopping allows the consumers to browse for products and comparing the prices between these online shops.
This
 means that some shop
sell
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sells
 online
,
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they do not need shop to sell directly, so saving space cost, the products they sell are often cheaper
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 which helps
costomer
someone who pays for goods or services
customers
 save a great deal of money There are a number of drawbacks of online shopping.
First
, since online customers cannot touch and feel the product physically before making buying decisions, they are able to gain bad experiences of shopping In fact, many online stores are likely to deliver fake or low-quality = inferior items for the purpose of increasing profits in a deceptive way, leading to customers’ frustration
as a result
.
Second
, by placing orders and completing online transactions, shoppers will be able to run the risk of being victimised by computer crimes,
such
 as ID theft.
This
 means that e-commerce has been a breeding ground for hi-tech crimes, like hackers, which makes their personal information invaded. In conclusion, the advancement in e-buying has resulted in convenience for
buyer
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the buyer
. By considering all the pros and cons they choose to buy products online or at the store depending on the different
goods
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
foods
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