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Some people believe that a visitor to country should follow local custom and tradition while other believe that host country should respect the cultural differences Discuss both these view and give your own opinion

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Mass immigration to the western world often debates on the popular media in terms of cultural values. It is often argued by some that an immigrant should follow tradition and culture of the
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 in order to blend in easily. Meanwhile, others still claim that the
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 cultural differences to make life easier for immigrant.
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, I believe that visitors should follow certain custom and traditions and the
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 show flexibility to cater for immigrants.
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 essay will explore both sides of the argument before discussing my opinion. On the one hand, the supporters of the idea that a visitor should follow local custom and tradition believe that it helps immigrants integrate properly in the society. As integrating into
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 allow the visitor to become an active member of the society. Take an example of New Zealand, where the Syrian migrants have simulated in the
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 on the northern island.
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, visitors can easily integrate in a society and flourish if they follow local custom. While
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, the advocates of the idea that the
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 the cultural values believe that it would reduce conflicts and would help immigrants in becoming a productive part of
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the community
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. As disrespect of culture would lead to a disintegrated population and conflicts.
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, a large African migrant population in Sweden suffered a lot at the hands of the Swedish government, which had conflicting policies in regards to their culture.
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, keeping in consideration the cultural differences would for sure reduce conflict. Whereas, I believe that a visitor should follow local cultural values to an extent, but the
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 for cultural differences not only help immigrants blend in easily but
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 reduce cultural conflicts. To sum up, in order for a
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 to have active immigrants that are productive and integrated within
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 so the
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 the cultural difference and visitors should follow local practices.
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