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Online shopping will lead to shut down of all shops in city and town. Do you agree or disagree?

#shops #city #town
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The meteoric rise of e-commerce has
lead
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led
 to the decline in offline sales and will eventually become the reason for its closure.
This
 essay agrees that
rising popularity
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the rising popularity
 of online shopping will lead lead to the shut down of city shops.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss about
variety
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the variety
a variety
 of options online shops provide and
secondly
, it will discuss about the ease of shopping these platforms provide. Shopping websites
provides
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provide
 a plethora of options to the buyers. Customers can compare prices,
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
 options and various other features of the product from
varity
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a variety
variety
 of sellers online.
On the contrary
,
this
 is not possible in offline shopping where consumers have limited stuff to choose from. In a recent study published by Times Journal, consumers prefer online
shopping as
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shopping, as
 they get most economical prices for the product. Comfort of shopping is another reason people are shifting towards online stores. People, nowadays, prefer to shop on the go as they don't want to spare time to go to stores and buy stuff. Shopping as an activity has become
secondary
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secondarily
 for people and
hence
, they prefer
buy
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to buy
 things during their leisure time like lunch breaks or while travelling back home from
office
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the office
, etc. In a recent survey done in my office, an astonishing 82% people preferred shopping online & comfort being one of the prime
reason
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reasons
. To conclude, variety of sellers providing multiple choices to the consumer and shopping at a touch of
button
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a button
 have given people the comfort zone and
hence
, saved a consumer's two precious belongings, namely, time and money.

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