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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. in your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages and, if so, how?

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Introduction
In nowadays
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 is one of
Neccesry
absolutely essential
necessary
 language in
World but
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the world, but
the world but
the World but
 learning
English
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 at school is often seen as more important than any other languages I
'm not completely agree
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do not completely agree
've not completely agreed
'll not completely agree
 with
this
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 statement as well. Why should other local language are far
important like
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important, like
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 as
well I
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well, I
 mentioned in below with respective example and benefits.
Body paragraph 1
I would like to give my opinion
with
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to
 why we improve local languages and what we would try to improve our education system. In education system are gives some basic knowledge about the local languages and gives all the
importants
of great significance or value
important
importance
 about the other
languages
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language
 preference,
Although
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 schools are taught
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 very well
to
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in
into
 childhood. But
this
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 should be dying out of other languages. In all
schoola
an educational institution
schools
school
scholars
 are
also
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giving
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given
 to preference to other local languages to children and get
awarenes
having knowledge of
awareness
 about those languages.
Body paragraph 2
Like we all are giving knowledge to our
child
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children
 about some basic knowledge and importance to our
languages
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languages, then
then
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 they will
also
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succed
attain success or reach a desired goal
succeed
 in future with respective field as well, between standard 1 to 10 teachers and schools are
teach
Suggestion
teaching
 them their basic languages. If some students are
interest
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interested
 in Gujrati
,
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,
marthi
engage in sexual intercourse
mate
Matthew
 or Bengali
etc
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etc., then
etc. then
then
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 they
also
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 get succeed in
these field
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this field
these fields
. But
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 languages are
Neccesry
absolutely essential
necessary
 to all standard
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
angles
are
Suggestion
is
 important
language but
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language, but
 respective other local languages are
alos
in addition
also
 important as well. In future the all
child
Suggestion
children
are know
Suggestion
are known
 very well with his/her local languages for business or communication that's why we all are
try
Suggestion
trying
 to improve the use of local languages like
Use synonyms
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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