The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.
The given diagram depicts the total
number
of university graduates
in Canada for both genders from 1992 to 2007. In general, the trends for both genders are similar: rising from 1992 to 1995, suffering a drop till 1998 before steadily rising for the next
ten years till 2007, with a small plateau between 2004 and 2005.
As for the specific numbers, there were slightly less than 100000 Canadian female university graduates
in 1992 and this
figure rose to about 105000 in 1995, before dropping slightly to about 100,000 in 1997 and 1998 and then
picking up again rapidly with a 50% increase to 150,000 such
graduates
in 2007.
In contrast
, there were only slightly more than 70,000 Canadian male university graduates
in 1992. The increase in male graduates
from 1992 to 1995 is similar to that of female
, with about 76,000 Fix the agreement mistake
females
graduates
in 1998, before this
figure dropped as well to 70,000 once again in 1998. Though more Canadian males graduated in the next
few years, there was yet another small drop in 2001 before the number
of such
graduates
slowly rose to about 95,000 in 2007, indicating a much smaller growth in the total number
of male graduates
- maybe only half the growth in total
Change the article
a total
the total
number
of female graduates
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