The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007.
The given diagram depicts the total
number
of university
graduates
in Canada for both genders from 1992 to 2007. In general, the trends for both genders are similar: rising from 1992 to 1995, suffering a drop till 1998 before steadily rising for the
next
ten years till 2007, with a small plateau between 2004 and 2005. As for the specific numbers, there were slightly less than 100000 Canadian female university
graduates
in 1992 and
this
figure rose to about 105000 in 1995, before dropping slightly to about 100,000 in 1997 and 1998 and
then
picking up again rapidly with a 50% increase to 150,000
such
graduates
in 2007.
In contrast
, there were only slightly more than 70,000 Canadian male university
graduates
in 1992. The increase in male
graduates
from 1992 to 1995 is similar to that of
female
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, with about 76,000
graduates
in 1998, before
this
figure dropped as well to 70,000 once again in 1998. Though more Canadian males graduated in the
next
few years, there was yet another small drop in 2001 before the
number
of
such
graduates
slowly rose to about 95,000 in 2007, indicating a much smaller growth in the total
number
of male
graduates
- maybe only half the growth in
total
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number
of female
graduates
.
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