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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A dress-code, mainly in a corporate environment has always been a topic for debate. How to dress in a
formally
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formal
formality
 is something discussed regularly to dictate the work environment. Different organization
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 their
preferences which
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preferences, which
 are
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 discussed in the given essay. A well-groomed and formally dressed person always creates a standard impression
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of
 professionalism. A certain professions
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 as bankers, lawyers, managers, salesman, etc.
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 required to be dressed professionally. A ton of organizations
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 strict rules related to formal attire as they deal with clients and delegates regularly which requires to create a positive impact. It shows employees’ commitment and credibility towards the job.
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, all companies believe in proficiency and profit so they essentially require smart and dedicated people to work for them irrespective of their dressing. Some
professions
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professions, such
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 as IT
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consulting
, software designers, content writers, etc.
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 not need to be dressed to the strict formal rules as their jobs do not require contact with clients. It allows them to be comfortably dressed without any restrictions. I personally believe that everyone should be dressed according to the occasion and profession to create a right image and authority.
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