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Every year several languages die out. Some ppl think that this is not important as life easier if there are fewer languages.

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Introduction
In
this
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 age of globalisation, together with the promotion of several dominant languages in the world, every year we see the disappearance of other local languages. While some people argued that the extinction of certain native languages is insignificant, I’m strongly against
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 view as
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On the one hand, I hold a belief that
language
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 is the fundamental tools to communicate with a native and to understand the culture and traditions of a community. If a
language
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 come to an extinct, the whole history about the locals and their culture will fall into incomprehension and erase its name from the world. Take the Voynich manuscript as an example. The book was written in a relatively alien
language
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that is
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 completely novel to the linguists. It has proven to hold valuable information about a whole area.
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Opponents of the view may argue that a variety of languages
only brings
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are only bringing
 confusion and difficulty in communication.
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 is justified to some extent,
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however it
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however, it
 is difficult to accept
this
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 point of view as with the introduction of technology, it has become relatively easy for people to transfer one
language
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 to another using different means of translation. As more and more
linguistists
the scientific study of language
linguistics
 and technology developers are now working to bring more and more
language
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 into the worldwide dictionary, difficulty due to
difference
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differences
the difference
 in communication may be
abolish
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abolished
 eventually.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe the fact that an increasing number of languages now dies out is undesirable, and attempts should be made to preserve these dying languages.

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