In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Today, everyone
want
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things that are easily available and affordable just like fast
food
.
People
eating
such
kind
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of
food
have various medical issues like diabetes,
cholestrol
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cholesterol
or even low blood pressure.In many countries, there is a spike in the number of
people
who are eating unhealthy.So,the
government
enforcing
higher
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amount of
tax
on fast
food
is a matter of concern. Over a decade, we have seen that there is
increase
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in
fast
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the fast
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food
industry. Various fast
food
chains are there like Mcdonalds,Subway and Pizza Hut.If
tax
is imposed,it would make a person think twice before buying it.
This
would decrease the number of
people
opting for fast
food
.
Furthermore
,the money collected by
such
taxes can be used for some noble cause.
For instance
, the money can help to buy healthy
food
for
the one
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those
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who
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needs
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.It can
also
used in medical care facilities.
Also
, if the seller realizes that
people
are willingly opting for healthy
food
,he would rather sell those items that
has
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appropriate nutrition.
This
helps
people
to suffer less and indeed
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a better life. But,there is always
other
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side to the coin.Fast
food
's main feature is that it is cheap.For example,
Mcdonalds
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McDonald
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serve their
food
items at a very reasonable price.
This
means
a
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poor can
also
buy it.But if
tax
is applied
then
it would create issues for them.As we very well know that fruits and vegetables
comes
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at
higher
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a higher
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price which not everyone can afford.
Also
, it may happen that
large
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number of
people
wont
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like the idea of imposing
tax
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a tax
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on fast
food
as
thats
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what they
are
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have been
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eating for
longest
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period of time.
This
would result in disputes between
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public and the
government
.
In addition
, these fast
food
chains contribute to the country's economy.The establishment of
tax
would lead to
low
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economy and it will be
problmatic
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problematic
for
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government
. I would conclude by saying that imposing higher
tax
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is not the solution to reduce unhealthy
food
as
low paid
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people
would suffer.The
government
can impose
tax
on some
paticular
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particular
food
items which are absolutely unhealthy for
human
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body.They can
aware
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the
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benefits of healthy
food
and a proper nutritional diet that can encourage
people
to live a better life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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