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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

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Over the
last
 half-century,
Advertizing
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
is became
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is becoming
has become
becomes
 more and more
popular among of
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popular among
 big companies. Some people consider that
advertizing
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
 low-quality products are bad for inhabitants.
However
, I think “if
product
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the product
a product
 is bad, who does buy it? In
this
 essay I will explore both
side
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sides
 of
advertizing
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
.
First
 of all, advertisement is pretty good for who is in the initial of
making
engage in
doing
 business as well as whom business is decreased to down. Because of, in fact advertising is useful when necessity is increased to some
product
.
For example
, without advertising people are not able to know about what is added to the
product
. Another plus of
advertizing
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
 is that
product
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the product
a product
 can be spread out in a short time.
Secondly
, The big issue is that
power
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the power
 of advertising is dramatically climbed of low-quality
product
.
Subsequently
, It
tend
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tends
 to less people`s
confident
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confidence
 to
advertizing
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
.
Accept space
.
For particularly,
advertizing
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
 of bad quality
product
`s can be influenced
on
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by
 people to buy it. Gradually, Truth
of
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in
 advertising is normally went down by people In
conclude
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concluding
,
power
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the power
 of advertising really can affect on people, to buy not on purpose some low-quality
product
.
Accept space
.
In order to avoid
this
 condition,
Government
Suggestion
the Government
 should manage all of them.
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  • consumer behavior
  • perceived need
  • lifestyle aspirations
  • brand image
  • prestige
  • psychological techniques
  • scarcity
  • social proof
  • celebrity endorsements
  • technological advancements
  • product innovations
  • emerging consumer needs
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