the graph shows data the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.

the graph shows data the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.
The multi-line graph reveals clear data about the yearly revenue of three bakeries in London over the covered period of the graph.In general, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upward trends in the
income
of both
Sofia
and
Cake
Lab
,
while
the earnings of Buns saw a substantial fall in the time period in question. In terms of
Sofia
's production,
sale
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recorded
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more firm stability over the first 5
years
about 58.000, simultaneously
Cake
Lab
's
income
reached an enormous growth
nearly
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60.000, after being fallen in the beginning couple
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respectively.
However
, in the rest of the period, both trends saw rocketing in sales.
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Sofia
gained extraordinary popularity and sharply boosted in profit in
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per
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years
by almost 40.000, at 100.000.
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to
Cake
Lab
, levelling out, followed by a steep climb in the rate of profit from 40.000 to roughly 60.000. Regarding
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Buns, in
initial
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time was dominated by
annual
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income
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80.000, to compare with
Cake
Lab
's
income
was
more
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quadruple
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and with
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20.000
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in
Sofia
.
However
, the trend sharply went down over the
years
. Between 2000 and 2005 there was a huge
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25% of the revenue,
also
what happened in the
last
5
years
with Buns business, recording almost 37.000.
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