the graph shows data the annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010.
The multi-line graph reveals clear data about the yearly revenue of three bakeries in London over the covered period of the graph.In general, what stands out from the graph is that there were considerable upward trends in the
income
of both Sofia
and Cake
Lab
, while
the earnings of Buns saw a substantial fall in the time period in question.
In terms of Sofia
's production, sale
recorded Fix the agreement mistake
sales
a
more firm stability over the first 5 Remove the article
apply
years
about 58.000, simultaneously Cake
Lab
's income
reached an enormous growth nearly
60.000, after being fallen in the beginning couple Change preposition
of nearly
years
respectively. Change preposition
of years
However
, in the rest of the period, both trends saw rocketing in sales. The
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apply
Sofia
gained extraordinary popularity and sharply boosted in profit in next
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the next
per
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apply
years
by almost 40.000, at 100.000. Comparing
to Wrong verb form
Compared
Cake
Lab
, levelling out, followed by a steep climb in the rate of profit from 40.000 to roughly 60.000.
Regarding to
Buns, in Remove the preposition
apply
initial
time was dominated by Correct article usage
the initial
annual
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an annual
income
nearly
80.000, to compare with Change preposition
of nearly
Cake
Lab
's income
was more
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quadruple
and with Wrong verb form
quadrupled
difference
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a difference
20.000
in Change preposition
of 20.000
Sofia
. However
, the trend sharply went down over the years
. Between 2000 and 2005 there was a huge lost
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loss
by
25% of the revenue, Change preposition
of
also
what happened in the last
5 years
with Buns business, recording almost 37.000.Submitted by tukhtakulov98 on
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