The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Some governments believe that
,
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,
spending
money
on music and theatre is a misuse
.
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.
Therefore
, spending
these
denotes a person or thing
this
money
on public services
such
as
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:
health care,
education hospital
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education, hospital
and transportation is a benefit to the local community. I totally agree with latter approach which I will discuss below. On the one hand, allocate
money
on public services is very crucial to develop
country
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the country
. Because, they are
integral part
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an integral part
of our life
.
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.
If funds dedicated transportation
such
as
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:
to repair roads and
such
kind of public transportation, it will reduce traffic accidents and passengers
go their homes
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go into their homes
quickly and without any traffic jams
.
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.
And
also
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,
hospitals ensure that the health of our society as well as education
prevent
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prevents
us be without knowledge. So
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,
I reckon to direct
money
on public services have
myriad
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a myriad
of benefits for local citizens.
On the other hand
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,
there are
number
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a number
of proses to spend
money
on
arts
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the arts
which we
also
taken into consideration.
Firstly
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,
arts
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the arts
are non-profit organisations and they do not get benefit at all
.
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.
Moreover
, the arts
also
have an important impact on our quality of life. So, financial institutions should
also
give them
money
to progress their valuable works and to protect
pur
of or belonging to us
our
national heritage. It is not to say that spending
money
on
arts
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the arts
is not entirely bad, of course. There are benefits in terms of improving theatre and music.
However
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,
spending on
money
on public services should be
had
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having
its own share.

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