The government's investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Governments should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Some governments believe that

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spending

money

on music and theatre is a misuse

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Therefore

, spending

these

denotes a person or thing

this

money

on public services

such

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health care,

education hospital

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education, hospital

and transportation is a benefit to the local community. I totally agree with latter approach which I will discuss below. On the one hand, allocate

money

on public services is very crucial to develop

country

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the country

. Because, they are

integral part

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an integral part

of our life

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If funds dedicated transportation

such

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to repair roads and

such

kind of public transportation, it will reduce traffic accidents and passengers

go their homes

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go into their homes

quickly and without any traffic jams

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And

also

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hospitals ensure that the health of our society as well as education

prevent

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prevents

us be without knowledge. So

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I reckon to direct

money

on public services have

myriad

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a myriad

of benefits for local citizens.

On the other hand

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there are

number

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a number

of proses to spend

money

arts

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the arts

which we

also

taken into consideration.

Firstly

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arts

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the arts

are non-profit organisations and they do not get benefit at all

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Moreover

, the arts

also

have an important impact on our quality of life. So, financial institutions should

also

give them

money

to progress their valuable works and to protect

pur

of or belonging to us

our

national heritage. It is not to say that spending

money

arts

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the arts

is not entirely bad, of course. There are benefits in terms of improving theatre and music.

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spending on

money

on public services should be

had

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having

its own share.

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cultural heritage
public services
economic benefits
mental health
well-being
equitable access
creativity
innovation
prioritize
essential services
healthcare
education
tourism
global recognition
holistic development
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infrastructure
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aesthetics
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