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The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in scotland for 20 years ago and last year

The pie charts below show the amount of electricity generated by energy source in scotland for 20 years ago and last year
#show #amount #electricity #energy #source #scotland #years #year
The given pie chart illustrates information about
percentage
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the percentage
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 of electricity generated in Scotland, by energy source for two decades ago and the
last
year
.
Overall
, Scotland has spent
huge
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a huge
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 amount of electricity generated to increase nuclear from 20
years
 ago to
last
year
,
on the other
hand
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,hand
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 gas and coal show decreased process during these
years
.
Also
, oil
hydro
 natural flow,
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hydro-pumped
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hydro
 pumped storage and other renewables have
showed
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shown
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 different changes. 20
years
 ago nuclear had
third
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a third
the third
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 place, but
last
year
 nuclear's range depicted more than
quarter
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a quarter
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. Coal despite coal
was
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apply
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being the most popular in the past, dropped approximately
to
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apply
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10% from 32.7%,
however
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,however
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 gas was not charged and lost only
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a minimally
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minimally
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 1
percent
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per cent
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.
In addition
,
hydro pumped
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hydro-pumped
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 storage and
hydro
 natural flow,
for example
,
also
 declined slightly by 1 % each of them. Oil (2.1%) with other renewables (2.8%) ,
last
year
 demonstrated two times more amount , rather than 20
years
 ago.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, years, hydro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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