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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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Information
technology
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 has increasingly changed our lives and it dominates almost every part of human
life
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. Even though it has brought many positive changes in our
life
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, it sometimes includes some disadvantages.
Technology
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 is now fundamental in everyday
life
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 and we probably couldn’t live easily without it. On the one hand, IT definitely has great importance in many fields. All the companies, in their offices store their records and data in the computers and use them every day to work, to do presentations and send emails. People no longer need to go to the supermarket to buy groceries and food,
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, they can stay at home and do their shopping
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in
 online markets, to some extent
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 be considered a negative change.
On the other hand
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, information
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 has had some negative impacts on our daily lives
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For
 example, people now can
menage
be successful; achieve a goal
manage
 different tasks by just some simple clicks on the computer.
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,
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 can cause the problem of people being obsessed with the virtual world and starting to lose interactions in real
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.
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, adults and most
importantly children
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importantly, children
 tend to
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spend
 a lot of hours in front of the computer playing
videogames
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video games
 or looking at their
phones
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phone
 and chatting. Most of the times kids prefer to play long distance with their friends through a
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video game
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 of playing a sport outside. The
technology
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 advances can make people become lazier,
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, affect their levels of health and fitness. In conclusion,
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 there are some drawbacks of information
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, the advantages of it have more impact on our daily lives. Those demerits can be eliminated with the help of proper supervision.

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