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The diagram illustrates the process is that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry

The diagram illustrates the process is that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry
#process #bricks #industry
The given diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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 information about
process
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the process
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 of
building
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the building
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 industry
with
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apply
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using
manufacture
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manufactured
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bricks
.
Overall
,
process
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the process
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consist
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consists
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 of seven steps which had been started with dig land to get clay and had been finished delivery
Firstly
 process
begin
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begins
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 with using bigger to get clay and send to fabric for sorting clay used
to
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for
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 metal grid and rollers. After adding sand and water
bricks
 are
molded
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moulded
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 or
cutter
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cut
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.
Fourth
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The fourth
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 step is drying them
about
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for about
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 24-48 hours,
following
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followed
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 by
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the kiln
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kiln
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kiln's
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 first moderate temperature
200°C-980
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of 200°C-980
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°C and after
high
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a high
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 temperature
870
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of 870
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°C - 1300°C.
Next
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The next
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 opposite action is cooling
bricks
 in
chamber
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the chamber
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around
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for around
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 48-72 hours.
Finally
,
bricks
 are
packaging
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packaged
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 and delivering
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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