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Fast food is universally in most countries and it is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that it is positive trend, while others do not

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Some people think that, most of people keen on from fast foods and
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 kind of products becoming increasingly popular.
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, others believe that it is harmful.
Personally I
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 partly agree with both of opinions and in the following paragraphs, I intend to support my opinion by stating arguments, reasons and examples. Let's start by looking at the disadvantages of junk foods.
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a well known fact
 that, fast foods constitutes lots of harm and fat.
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 digestion system.
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, after eating hot dogs or hamburgers our organism star
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. From the fact that it contains too much fat, the body does not have time to kindle everything. Eating fast food regularly leads to fullness.
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, extra weight leads to early death. In general, too much addiction junk foods detrimental.
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, I think that, we can find advantages too. To be more exact snack's cost not expensive and preparing faster than other meats.
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, most of people choose and prefer
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 kind of foodstuff. A perfect example for
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 can be bistro near our homes. In conclusion, delicious and cheap products always were popular across all. Taking all the above into account, it may be concluded that everything can be perfect if it is in balance
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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