A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is clear that, nowadays our vulnerable world is under jeopardising of feeling as 
humanity
, honour, trust and kindness. Most of people prefer social and material value more than mora
l or
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morality
humanity
. In my opinion
this
action incorrect because people must stay people in any situations and feelings which illustrate above make us  ourselves,
therefore
I absolutely agree with opin
ion.
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the opinion
Of course, money can solve lots of problems and you can buy anything if have cash ,
h
ow
Accept space
,
ever
humanity
more expensive than other means. To be exac
tly, yo
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exact
u can not buy emotion, you can only deserve them. How? It is easy. Need just some attention from everyone to clos
es. Af
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close
ter all, it is easy
job. As
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an easy job
we know each person need to adve
rtence and
call attention to
advertise
care. People should be more polite, funny and happy. Your mood plays majo
rity rol
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major
e in others life too. Because when u fe
e
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
l yourself over the moon, others can feel
this
emotion thanks to you too.
Therefore
, try to be bett
er day- by
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a better day
-day. It can safe
humanity
and kindness.
On the other hand
, another significant key is r
ightly use mat
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is right to use
is rightly to use
is rightly used
rightly uses
erial possessions. Using
this
method you can keep your moral feelings too
also
it will be frosting in t
he
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on
cake. Agai
n
Accept comma addition
Again, this
this
question, how? Answer easy as act.
For example
,   you can give minimal part of your salary to charity every month. If you do reiterate
this
action day-by-day afflicted persons can  recuperate with your help and support. But the most important is, you improve your humaneness on people's eyes. I can definitely say that, it is  plea
santly and
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pleasant
pleasing
pleasanter
pleased
blessing  to make smile and happy  in pers
ons face.
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the persons face
In conclusion, I want to say that currency will be chan
ge in
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changed
the
next
decade, but outspokenly feelings never change and always stay actual.
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