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You are planning a 2-day work training outside your city next month. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel regarding accommodation arrangement for your visit. In your letter, you should tell: introduce yourself and your company ask availability of their rooms tell him/her that your every arrangement and needs

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inquire about the availability of rooms in your hotel
next
 month. My name is Shakib Qureshi, I am the general manager of the Invisalign industries and private limited.
Furthermore
, our company is responsible for the distribution and production of
advance
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system
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 worldwide. I am sure you might have recognized the company
,
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 since we had many of our conferences organised at your hotel in the past.
Next
 month, I would be visiting Mumbai city along with 3 of my other colleagues, in order to organise a two-day training program.
Thus
, I was looking forward
for
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 an arrangement of a hall as well as rooms for us. The dates are from the 3rd to the 5th of April 2020.
Therefore
, I was hoping you could provide me with the details of any availability for the given dates. Let me provide you
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 about the event. I'll be requiring a hall, which can accommodate at least 50 people. It will be an afternoon program so snacks and tea would be preferable.
Moreover
, a projector
as well as chairs for sitting
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 would be among the requisite.
In addition
 to
this
, I would like to include breakfast and dinner for me and my colleagues. I hope that
,
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 your hotel could provide
with
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the necessary arrangements and inform me about the possibilities. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thanking you. Yours sincerely, Shakib Qureshi
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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