In the past, people wore traditional clothes, spoke languages and practiced activities as dictated by their regional culture. These days, the world’s cultures resemble one another quite closely. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Globalization has brought with it both positive and negative developments. On the positive side, it has encouraged the world’s people to grow closer together through common culture and language. On the negative side, it has caused the customs of certain people to become forgotten. Despite
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, it is argued the merging of the world’s lifestyles is a beneficial trend.
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will be proven by analyzing how common ideology and culture help to reduce both incidences of war and hate crime.
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, countries that share common attributes tend to be less likely to engage in war with one another. Europe acts as a good example here. Only one hundred years ago, many European countries warred with each other over ideological differences. Today, after major movements towards cultural,
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and linguistic unity, these same countries are proud to be united under a single heading, the European Union. The now peaceful temperament of Europe acts as good evidence
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the benefits that come through the blending of ideologies and cultures.
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, the merging of global lifestyles poses a negative correlation to the incidences of hate crimes, and
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is a very positive thing.
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organized hate groups,
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as the Klu Klux Klan, has fallen drastically over the
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century in North America.
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occurs simultaneously with the immigration rises that occurred during the same period.
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, it can be concluded that the mixing of cultures directly reduces hate crime. After analyzing the manner in which globalization minimizes both the chances of war and crimes motivated by hate, it is concluded that
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is a trend that brings positive results to the world. It is hoped the mixing of cultures
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globally into the foreseeable future.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homogenization
  • cultural diversity
  • identity
  • traditions
  • unique
  • history
  • understanding
  • conflicts
  • blending
  • innovative
  • expressions
  • economic inequalities
  • social inequalities
  • globalized culture
  • prioritizes
  • Western ideals
  • cultural imperialism
  • marginalization
  • communication
  • global tourism
  • economic opportunities
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