Professional workers like doctors, nurses and teachers make a greater contribution to society and so should be paid more than sports and entertainment personalities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Earning enough

money

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is one of the

factor

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factors

which people decide to embark a career. It is thought that due to the major

contribuation

the part played by a person in bringing about a result

contribution

contributions

of some professions

such

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as physician, nurses or

instructros

a person whose occupation is teaching

instructors

in a society, they ought to make more

money

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than

sportmen

someone who engages in sports

sportsmen

or entertainment workers. In my

opnion

a personal belief or judgment that is not founded on proof or certainty

opinion

, ,

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but

such

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critical occupation

shoulld

expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something

should

earn reasonable

money

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. It is clear that the amount of income is pivotal when someone wish to enter a profession

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and professional workers are not

exeption

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excepted

exception

exceptional

exceptions

. Wishing to implement a job, someone should have

money

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satisfiction

the contentment one feels when one has fulfilled a desire, need, or expectation

satisfaction

more than his regular daily

requirment

required activity

requirement

requirements

or even other

skiiled

having or showing or requiring special skill

skilled

individuals.

This

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is due to the fact that he must strive much in his entire life, and it is

completly

to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent

completely

rational to have a high level of

finacial

involving financial matters

financial

status

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For instance

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, a surgeon or even a university professor

probably spend

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probably spends

more than one

third

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of his life to reach a position to be able to work in his

profesion

the body of people in a learned occupation

profession

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Therefore

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, paying

adequete amount

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an adequate amount

adequate amount

money

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will be

act

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acting

as a

motivetor

a positive motivational influence

motivator

to not get

disappionted

disappointingly unsuccessful

disappointed

and keep moving forward to serve better in their community. One the other hand, many

soprstmen

someone who engages in sports

sportsmen

or other

entertainmnet

an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention

entertainment

charechters

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start when they are too young and might retire

soonly

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. If they did not walk in the path in the childhood, the chance to succeed in would be negligible. Take a well known soccer player like

Daivid

(Old Testament) the 2nd king of the Israelites; as a young shepherd he fought Goliath (a giant Philistine warrior) and killed him by hitting him in the head with a stone flung from a sling; he united Israel with Jerusalem as its capital; many of the Psalms are attributed to David (circa 1000-962 BC)

David

Bekham for an example. He started since he was only 7 years old when at the same time the other children with the same age was enjoying their

chilhood

the time of person's life when they are a child

childhood

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, many investors and

buisinessess

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

businesses

invest on the professionals to make

money

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resulting creating numerable jobs

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Sport professionals and others,

consequentley have

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consequently, have

consequently have

a marvellous impact on

economy

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the economy

and are worth to earn a huge amount of

money

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. To

concule

postpone indefinitely or annul something that was scheduled

cancel

conceal

council

, I do consider that the role of some skilled individuals like doctors or teachers

are

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indispensable in a society and they should have more than

avarege

approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value

average

of regular income.

However

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, the effects of some careers like

sportmen

a person with great powers and abilities

superman

economy

Suggestion

the economy

could not be neglected justifying to have a high income.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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352 words

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