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NOWADAYS EMPLOYERS CONSIDER FORMAL ACADEMIC QUALIFICATIONS MORE IMPORTANT THAN LIFE EXPERIENCE AND PERSONAL QUALITIES. WHY IS THAT? IS THAT? IS THIS A POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE DEVELOPMENT?

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Applying for a certain
job
 in
this
 modern era become more and more arduous due to the competition of the different organizations. Employers nowadays, consider formal academic qualification as a priority, rather than the qualities of the employees, while other commenters, still agree with the issue. The writer, strongly disagrees, with the latter view and the reasons will discuss below, followed by a conclusion. To start with, having a wide experience at
work
 is more important that having a formal academic qualification, because there are numerous advantages or benefits.
First
, it does not need a numerous training to cope up with the
job
.
Second
, they already have a wide background, which they can apply to their
next
job
.
For instance
, a newly hired manager, knows how to manage the employees because of her past experience.
Furthermore
, a positive attitude or personal qualities like hard working, diligent and cooperative are more likely to be considered too when it comes to
job
. Even though, they are not highly intellectual, but acquiring these desirable qualities it helps the company to become successful and strong. These attitudes can build a trust to the customers and to the organization, which it will lead to a successful
work
.
For instance
, a dedicated worker promoted well due to his hard
work
 despite the fact the fact that he is not highly intelligent like others. To sum up,
although
 a formal academic qualification is essential for the progress of a company,
however
, I believe that acquiring a desirable quality and life experience are considered to be a priority when it comes to a
work
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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