Throughout history, male leaders have led us into violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders it will be more peaceful. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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chance
to govern and lead. Basically, there are more examples of the men who led the various activities, schemes programs and mostly end up in wars and disputes. It is reckoned by some individuals that if Suggestion
the chance
a chance
this
has been led by women it would be
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women, it would be
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and tranquil but I completely disagree with the fact.
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that I am against feminism but
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feminism, but
analyzing
the dark side of the situation. Most of the time it is seen that the women bosses are less strict as compared to the male bosses as they get easily persuaded by the excuses given the staff and trust them easily. Women consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
doesn’t possess
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don’t possess
commanding nature
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a commanding nature hence
hence
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moreover
, we live in patriarchal society here women always need a man at their backend
for every act.
However
, when we look back into history the historical events are the proofs that the governance led by women also end
up in war, conflict and violent Suggestion
also ends
has also ended
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activities, for
for instance
Rani Lakshmi Bai led the war from Jhansi for independent
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independence
first lady prime minister
of India Indira Gandhi adopted different violent means against Suggestion
the first lady prime minister
Sikhs religious temple
(Golden Temple).
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the Sikhs religious temple
On the other hand
, men are more of commanding behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
therefore
, they have different attitude
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work, hence
hence
, are less prone to get satisfied with praise by any staff member or faculty. They are more not violent but
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violent, but
taken
as responsibility. They think practically with an optimistic thinking. The struggle of independence is the example of their dedication towards the nation, no doubt it was lead violently and many Suggestion
have taken
are taken
took
conflict
occurred but it resulted in very positive output.
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women
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women, hence
hence
, they can govern better than women as earlier example
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the earlier example
earlier examples
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