Throughout history, male leaders have led us into violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders it will be more peaceful. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Well when

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Well, when

we go those the historical background, it is very clear that women and men tried their best whenever got

chance

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the chance

a chance

to govern and lead. Basically, there are more examples of the men who led the various activities, schemes programs and mostly end up in wars and disputes. It is reckoned by some individuals that if

this

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has been led by

women it would be

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women, it would be

clam

steadiness of mind under stress

calm

and tranquil but I completely disagree with the fact. Actually,

fact

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the fact

is not

this

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that I am against

feminism but

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feminism, but

the reason is that women are soft hearted and thinks every aspect emotionally without

analyzing

consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning

analysing

the dark side of the situation. Most of the time it is seen that the women bosses are less strict as compared to the male bosses as they get easily persuaded by the excuses given the staff and trust them easily. Women

doesn’t possess

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don’t possess

commanding nature

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a commanding nature, hence

a commanding nature hence

hence

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, the guideline

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rule and regulations made by them need more power to get implemented

moreover

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, we live in patriarchal society here women always need a man at their

backend

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for every act.

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, when we look back into history the historical events are the proofs that the governance led by women

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also end

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also ends

has also ended

up in war, conflict and violent

activities

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activities, for

for instance

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Rani Lakshmi Bai led the war from Jhansi for

independent

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independence

in 1847, later on

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first lady prime minister

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the first lady prime minister

of India Indira Gandhi adopted different violent means against

Sikhs religious temple

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the Sikhs religious temple

(Golden Temple).

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, men are more of commanding

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

therefore

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, they have

different attitude

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a different attitude

different attitudes

toward the

work

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work, hence

hence

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, are less prone to get satisfied with praise by any staff member or faculty. They are more not

violent but

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violent, but

definitely dedicated to the work, they

taken

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have taken

are taken

took

as responsibility. They think practically with an optimistic thinking. The struggle of independence is the example of their dedication towards the nation, no doubt it was lead violently and many

conflict

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conflicts

occurred but it resulted in very positive output. To conclude, we can say that men

has

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have

practical

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practiced

thinking and stable thoughts unlike

women

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women, hence

hence

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, they can govern better than women as

earlier example

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an earlier example

the earlier example

earlier examples

nowhere showcase the activities led by women ended peacefully.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

gender dynamics
militaristic policies
expansionist
diplomatic governance
risk-taking
societal norms
inclusive approach
collaborative governance
gender stereotypes
individual qualities
comprehensive approach
conflict resolution
aggression
historical context
colonial expansion
contemporary
male dominance
innate differences
peaceful governance
competitive strategies

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Throughout history, male leaders have led us into violence and conflict. If a society is governed by female leaders it will be more peaceful. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fully explain your ideas

This drawing guides you through the steps for making freeze-dried coffee from start to finish. This is a linear process.

Some says that sports play an important role in society. Others, however,think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The world of work is changing so fast that employees cannot depend on having the same job or working conditions. What are the possible causes for rapid change, and what suggestions could be given for preparing people?

Some jobs are based at a single work place where the hours are the same each day, while other jobs involve frequent travel and ireegular working hours. Discus the advantages of both types of job and give your opinion about which one is best.

Some people think that men and women have different qualities, thearefore certain jobs are suitable for men and other for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?