The graph shows the data about annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010
The
lie
graph presents data about Correct your spelling
line
annual
earnings of three Correct article usage
the annual
bakeries
in London between 2000 and 2010. The information is presented in terms of 3 bakeries
as an
annual earnings. Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
Overall
, it is clear that
the most high
Change the adjective
highest
term
in the first year in all three bakeries
was buns
. The least less
bakery is Correct quantifier usage
apply
Cake
Lab
.
In 2000 the term
of Cake
Lab
is 20.000 while
all
2 terms Change preposition
in all
Buns
and Sofia were 50.000and
60.000. Followed by Correct your spelling
50.000 and
this
between 2000 and 2004 the 2 bakeries
of Buns
and Cake
Lab
we’re growing on few thousand, Buns
was 79.000 the
and Correct article usage
apply
Cake
LabCake Lab
was 30.000. During this
period the term
of Cake
Lab
has returned to the first step (20.000). However
, Sofia was progressing on
the same lines till Change preposition
along
the
2006.
Meanwhile, the Change the article
apply
term
of Buns
was
sharply decreased to 10.000. After that in 2007 the Sofia was directly increased Unnecessary verb
apply
in
20.000. Change preposition
to
Accordingly
this
in
Change preposition
apply
this
year the Cake
Lab
was growing in
10.000Change preposition
by
,
Remove the comma
apply
when
the Correct word choice
while
Buns
was
including 40.000. But Correct subject-verb agreement
were
at the end
of 2010
the annual earnings of three Add a comma
,2010
bakeries
have
reached Unnecessary verb
apply
at
almost the same point.Remove the preposition
apply
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