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The graph shows the data about annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010

The graph shows the data about annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010
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The
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 graph presents data about
annual
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 earnings of three
bakeries
 in London between 2000 and 2010. The information is presented in terms of 3
bakeries
 as
an
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annual earnings.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
most high
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term
 in the first year in all three
bakeries
 was
buns
. The least
less
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bakery is
Cake
Lab
. In 2000 the
term
 of
Cake
Lab
 is 20.000
while
all
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 2 terms
Buns
 and Sofia were
50.000and
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50.000 and
 60.000. Followed by
this
 between 2000 and 2004 the 2
bakeries
 of
Buns
 and
Cake
Lab
 we’re growing on few thousand,
Buns
 was 79.000
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and
Cake
 LabCake
Lab
 was 30.000. During
this
 period the
term
 of
Cake
Lab
 has returned to the first step (20.000).
However
, Sofia was progressing
on
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 the same lines till
the
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2006. Meanwhile, the
term
 of
Buns
was
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sharply decreased to 10.000. After that in 2007 the Sofia was directly increased
in
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 20.000.
Accordingly
this
in
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this
 year the
Cake
Lab
 was growing
in
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by
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 10.000
,
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when
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while
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 the
Buns
was
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were
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 including 40.000. But
at the end
 of
2010
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,2010
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 the annual earnings of three
bakeries
have
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reached
at
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almost the same point.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bakeries, term, buns, cake, lab with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "presents" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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