The graph shows data about annual earnings of three bakeries in London, 2000-2010
The
glance at the table reveals the data about incomes in three popular bakeries in London.
In General, during the given Correct article usage
A
periods
earnings Change to a genitive case
period's
periods'
in
Change preposition
apply
considrably
decreased the bakery of Correct your spelling
considerably
Buns
; However
, the rate of profit a sharp increase
in Replace the word
increased
Sofia
; There was a significant growth of incomes in Cake
lab.
It’s exactly seen from the lines in initial Correct article usage
the Cake
time
Buns
around 80 in the top; However
, to compare with earnings in Sofia
illustrated 60. The trend of Buns
twice fluctuations in next
five Correct article usage
the next
year
from 2000. Followed by, Fix the agreement mistake
years
enermously
decreased with a bit Correct your spelling
enormously
oscillation
a Change preposition
of oscillation
second
five years from first
given tense. The line of Correct article usage
the first
Sofia
in Correct article usage
the begining
begining
Correct your spelling
beginning
time
was around 55. And stay constant to till 2005
year from 2000. After that, an Change the article
the 2005
enermous
boom Correct your spelling
enormous
by
20 in Change preposition
of
next
3 years.
The Correct article usage
the next
incomes
of Fix the agreement mistake
income
Cake
lab in the initial Correct article usage
the Cake
time
was
lower than other bakeries. But Correct subject-verb agreement
were
at the end
of given
term came out between the given two bakeries. Correct article usage
the given
In
addition
can Add a comma
,addition
be say
, the trend of Change the verb form
be said
Buns
fell to the bottom, the line of Sofia
came out the
top and Change preposition
to the
Cake
lab Correct article usage
the Cake
is reached
the middle Change the verb form
has reached
at the end
of given
Correct article usage
the given
time
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