The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Writing task 1 The diagram below describes the process of the freshwater

species'

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species

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, as salmonid fish, life cycle. There are 3 main steps, starting

from

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with

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the

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appearance of salmon eggs and ending with adult fish.

Initially

, the first picture on the diagram shows a habitat place of nests for

salmons

' eggs. It

is usually reeds

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is usually reeded

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with a lot of stones at the roots. These plants mostly

locate

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located

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in the upper

river

, where the

river

flow is slow. It takes approximately 5-6 months for eggs to develop, after which little

salmons

, called 'fry',

born

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are born

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their

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and their

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length is about 3-8 cm.

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,Next

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they swim to the lower

river

and fast flowing brings them to the open sea, for 4 years, during

this

time group of 'fry' turns into 'smolt', who grows in size to 12-15 cm. When 'smolts' enter the open sea, they live there for 5 years and become larger, transforming into adult

salmons

, reaching 70-76 cm long. After a complete development

salmons

come back to the upper

river

, where they are able to continue progeny, and

life

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the life

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cycle repeats again.

Sun Mar 22 2020

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

3 paragraphs

181 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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