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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not well-managed. What are the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world? Do you think that the benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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Although
 holidaymakers contribute hugely to the economies of many popular destinations, the influx of tourists can
also
 cause serious issues.
This
 essay will demonstrate how tourism can transform the economy of poor areas, but will
also
 show that
this
 can lead to
such
 problems as the displacement of local people. Whilst acknowledging that there are drawbacks, the essay will argue that the advantages of the
tourist
 industry outweigh the disadvantages. One country that has experienced a significant economic boost from tourism is Thailand. Over the past 50 years, many of its small fishing villages, where people often struggled to make a living, have been developed into thriving holiday destinations. With all the hotels, restaurants, shops and other
tourist
 facilities that have been developed, there are now enough jobs for everyone and the general standard of living has greatly increased. Many local people have spotted new business opportunities and become entrepreneurs which has
further
 diversified the economy. In Venice,
on the other hand
, the huge popularity of the beautiful canals and stunning architecture with visitors from around the world has had a negative impact on local residents. The growing need for
tourist
 accommodation, places to eat and shops have forced many people from their homes to make way for
this
 new development. Not only have these people suffered by having to move away from their family and friends, but the situation has
also
 resulted in a lost sense of community in the worst affected areas. In conclusion,
although
 mass tourism can sometimes result in local residents having to be relocated, it greatly improves the lives of most people as well as contributing significantly to the national economy.
Hence
, the positive effects of developing a
tourist
 industry definitely outweigh the drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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