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Writing task 1 The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Writing task 1 The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting and and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#show #uk #graduate #students #work #college #summarise #information #features #comparisons
The chart shows information about
UK
graduate
 and postgraduate
students
 who did not go full-time
work
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did
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 after leaving college in 2008.
Overall
 if we look at the chart, we can see
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inducators
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indicators
 destination of
UK
graduate
 and postgraduate
students
.In
2008
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the 2008
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 year was the most
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popular
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than
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then
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Voluntary
work
 was far near as successful as
Futhers
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the Futhers
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 study in
UK
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the UK
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 over the period in question. Looking at the details, in Unemployment
work
 of
graduate
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graduates
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 there were nearly 16,235
students
 but
next
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the next
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inducator
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indicator
 was
big
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a big
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different
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students
of
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apply
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postgraduate there were nearly 1,625
students
,
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however
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However
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 the number of
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graduate
astudents
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students
a student's
work
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working
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 in Furtherstudy job
was
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was
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two times higher than part-time
work
 occupation at 29,665 and 17,735 respectively.
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Moreover
 the number of
pstgraduate
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postgraduate
students
also
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 one times advanced than
part-times
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part-time
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work
.
By
contrast
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 one top
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of
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 that
last
 one is Voluntary
work
 there were 345
students
 of postgraduate and 3,500
students
 of
graduate
. Well the
students
 of
graduate
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indicator
 as most
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popular
 as the
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postgraduate
 in
UK
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the UK
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 in 2008

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, graduate, students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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