The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below describes the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given table illustrates the figures for male and female workers, and manufacturing units in England and Wales in
10 year
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intervals starting from 1851 to 1901.
Overall
, the
number
of factory workers dropped steadily throughout the given period and males outnumbered females in most years.
Moreover
, the
number
of
factories
saw a fluctuating trend in England and Wales. Looking at the table in more detail, there were 477,100 employees in British and Welsh
factories
in 1851.
However
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by 1901,
this
number
had plummeted to just 61,000, registering a drop each year. In terms of
the
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gender distribution, men outnumbered women in all years except 1861, when there were 131,780 men as compared to 160,000 women. By 1901, the gap between the genders too had narrowed substantially (31,000 men and 30,000 women).
Finally
, the total
number
of
factories
showed a fluctuating trend. There were 225
factories
in Britain and Wales in 1851.
This
number
surged to 721 in 1881 and
then
dropped to 600 by 1901.
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